Poetry

Three Soldiers

Only three soldiers left on your battlefield.
Is it worth it?
To mortify those three soldiers?
They are about to forfeit.
They have the same look in their eyes, rage.
So powerful,
like the hunger in a hunter’s eyes.
The red of the fire will consume them.
They will despise you,
just watch.

The ice started at my fingertips,
got to my brain,
slowly replenishing my blood with anger.

They won’t grieve for you.
This fight needs to end.
They need this fight to be over,
I need this fight to be over.
It’s time for this chapter to end.
Do you really want to lose those three soldiers?
I hope it was worth fighting for.

Reflection: 1. What is the theme of your poems? Why did you select your theme?

The theme of my poems is desire. I chose this poem because a lot of people in my life my moved or left me lately, and I want to express how desire that they were still with me. In this poem, I took more of a angry tone because I'm made at the people who are the reason why I'm not with them any more.

2. What makes this poem your best poem?

This poem has the most figurative language and it has the best word choice. This poem doesn't just have desire, but it also has anger. I feel like I got the point across with all of the word choice and figurative language. I think that this is really strong and powerful.

3. What is the best line or stanza from your poem? Write it down. Explain with it is your best line or stanza.

"The ice started at my fingertips,
got to my brain,
slowly replenishing my blood with anger."

I think that this is my best stanza because this it not only has personification, but it has really powerful word choice. I think I like how it says "slowly replenishing my blood with anger." I feel like it makes a strong statement while complimenting

4. What would you do differently or what do you feel you need to improve?

I think that it might be too wordy. I think that I have a few words that don't need to be where they are. I have too many "the"s, "they"s, etc...